Assignment #11- Patterns of Error

     So far, my writing has been getting a ton of errors. First, whenever I'm writing my paper, I need to explain more in my writing. Most comments that I receive from peer review that my introduction shows lack of details. This effect my writing by not being clear for my reader and makes it hard to understand. Second, I tend to be excessively wordy in my papers! This is shoddy habit that I have and need to improve it. I guess reason why I do this because I want to meet requirement of the page. Finally, transition from paragraph to paragraph. My transitions does not show that connecting flow towards the next paragraph. Without transitions my will be very stiff to read.      
     In order for me to avoid these errors I can write out a rough draft and review it or lets a classmate review it.  Even though, I make these mistakes constantly I need to push myself and pay attention to what I'm writing.

Assignment #10- Thinking Critically About Peer Review

     So far, peer review in class has been very helpful for me. I don't know how it could be improve better? It just great as it is. My only strengths for peer review is helping writer to be more concise. My weakness for peer review, finding grammar mistakes. I remember a time when a student asked me to revise their paper, I helped that person making his paper sound great! But the final grade was "C+" because I didn't found all grammar mistakes. Another weakness for peer review, I sometime don't give full feedbacks. The reason I don't give out my full feedbacks, because I don't any have confidences on my feedbacks. I believe that my feedbacks could be wrong.                  
     I find it helpful to do peer review for earlier stages of the writing process. This helps students share idea with classmates. For examples, This week small groups has prepare me for my third essay assignment. At first it was really hard what to write about, but working in small groups has really show that we work together this assignment could be easy. We shared our opinions towards each other and I believe that was great. I believe the amount of time was great for the small groups.

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Assignment #8- Thinking About Arguments

The article that I read was, "Don’t presume to know a pig’s mind". The reason I chose this article, when seeing the pigs being pumped with antibiotics and processed into machine has opened my mind.  

For my paper, I don't know what to write about. The reason why I picked article, because I found this to be interesting then the others. I guess I could write about how this article show that pigs are mistreated in order for the farmer's companies to make money for their business.

Assignment #6 (Make-Up)

   Rhetorical situation of my advertisement analysis essay shows context. For example, how the axe has targets young male by showing how standard men, using axe’s grooming products, can grab attention of attractive woman. The purpose of Axe are to persuade young male to buying their products. 
   This will affect my paper by showing how axe set someone's mind at their products. Hopefully, my trustworthy tone toward this can help my reader of what I'm try to convince my stamens towards Axe products.